Friday, January 2, 2009

Now begins
the long, slow slide.

Scrambling backwards
against the tide,
we struggle
against the inevitable
gravity
of the situation.

6 comments:

TACParent said...

This is a nice poem. I think it captures the situation well. And it even rhymes at times (hey, so did that!). Rhyming isn't a necessity in my book. In fact, when I write one that actually rhymes it almost surprises me.

Dymphna (4HisChurch) said...

I wanted to experiment with different types of rhyme. I read something recently outlining various rhyming schemes, but now I can't find it. Anyway, I might rhyme more if I can do it in "odd" ways!

Art and Poetry said...

This is very true! it sounds like me. I like rhyme but I find it difficult to write anything that doesn't rhyme

Dymphna (4HisChurch) said...

I usually prefer writing without rhyme. I hate for poems to sound too much like children's books. But I'm getting more open to using some rhyme.

S.L. Corsua said...

Those first two lines reel me in fast, and the rest of the poem does not disappoint. It's a tight poem, with much substance to speak of. ;) Cheers.

Dymphna (4HisChurch) said...

Thanks so much, SL. I haven't been too happy with my poetry lately.

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